still
3 butterflies clouding around each other
crowding the space between wings
mother duck
4 ducklings in a square
then 8 following behind
catching up
feeling something
wanting to fill the feeling with something else
changing futures
spelling out numbers
swimming one way
flying another
but mostly going nowhere
crowding the space between wings
mother duck
4 ducklings in a square
then 8 following behind
catching up
feeling something
wanting to fill the feeling with something else
changing futures
spelling out numbers
swimming one way
flying another
but mostly going nowhere
posted by hilary at Tuesday, June 27, 2006
2 Comments:
first two stanzas get the message across yet feel a little cluttered, if that makes sense.
the last two put me in that shocking state of realising how good of a writer you are and leave me wanting more.
more.
more.
seriously...the last five lines of this astound and please me greatly.
you've got a gift, lady.
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